Manuscript Status: 6 Weeks Delivery
Mentors: Dee Romito and Jen Malone
Mentee: Elizabeth Dimit
Title: OPERATION: NORMAL
Category/Genre: Middle Grade Contemporary
Word Count: 33,000
Pitch:
When ten-year-old Avery Lawson learns she has ADHD, she launches Operation: Normal—a plan to prove she’s (mostly) like every other kid in class. Because if she can’t stop staring at her teacher’s furry eyebrows or resist her unrelenting need to doodle, she’ll never prove she’s more than a diagnosis. RAMONA QUIMBY meets FISH IN A TREE.
Excerpt:
Avery Lawson had nine hundred ninety-nine cats. Too bad none of them were real.
Her parents had told her she couldn’t get a live, breathing cat until it didn’t rain in their town of Mount Crescent, Oregon, for a year. Or when she became responsible. Whichever came first.
Avery scowled out the window at the soggy schoolyard, uncapped her blue marker, and prepared to draw her one-thousandth cat. The pleasant squeak of marker on her paper drowned out the annoying scritch-scratch of pencils as the other fifth-graders copied spelling words. Boring words like peaceful and business and vulture.
The squeaking filled her ears as she drew a fluffy tail right over the word cabbage. She added whiskers, but one got so long it wouldn’t fit on the paper. She stopped the marker at the edge of her worksheet. She shouldn’t draw on her desk. Only kindergartners did that.
But the whisker wanted—no, it demanded—to be longer. Clutching the marker, Avery stretched the line to the end of her desk.
Perfect.
“Avery, can you define this for us?” Mr. Silva’s voice poked its way into her ears.
Her head jerked up. What was he talking about?
Avery’s teacher tapped on the word policy, which loomed on the glowing screen. “Are you with us?” he asked.
She stared at her cat-covered paper.
It’d happened again. Avery’s rocket-speed brain had propelled her to Mars while the rest of her class stayed on Earth.
24 Comments
Lauren Spieller · November 3, 2016 at 10:23 pm
This was fantastic! Avery reminds me of myself when I was in middle school 😉 Please send the full manuscript (as well as a synopsis if you have one) to lauren@triadaus.com with “Pitch Wars: [YOUR TITLE]” as the subject line. Please also include your query in the body of the email. I look forward to reading!
-Lauren Spieller, TriadaUS
Saba Sulaiman · November 3, 2016 at 11:33 pm
Hi Elizabeth,
What a great opening! Please send a query, synopsis, and full manuscript (Word documents will suffice) to ssulaiman@talcottnotch.net — and don’t forget to mention #PitchWars in your subject line. Thanks—looking forward to my read!
Good luck,
–Saba
Stacey Donaghy · November 4, 2016 at 12:35 am
This is exactly what I have been hoping to find! Great voice. Please send the full manuscript as a word attachment to stacey@donaghyliterary.com, place “Pitch Wars”and the title in the subject line. Include your query in the body of the email. Looking forward to reading your story.
Brooks Sherman · November 4, 2016 at 8:52 am
Wow, what great voice you have! (The better to read you with!) I’d love to keep reading. Please email your full manuscript as a Word attachment to brooks@thebentagency.com, along with your original query and a synopsis (if available) with “Pitch Wars: OPERATION NORMAL” in the subject of your email. Thanks, and I look forward to seeing more!
Laura · November 4, 2016 at 9:06 am
Sounds fantastic! Could you send me the official query in the body of the email, with the first 50 pages in an attached Word doc, and “Pitch Wars Request” in the subject line to laura(at)triadaus(dot)come, please? Thanks!
–Laura Crockett, TriadaUS Literary Agency
Laura · November 4, 2016 at 9:07 am
(dot)com is what I meant. Good morning!
Jim McCarthy · November 4, 2016 at 9:29 am
I’d love to have a look! Please send the full along for my review. A Word attachment is most preferable if possible. jmccarthy@dystel.com. Thanks!
Caitie Flum · November 4, 2016 at 11:31 am
Love the voice in this! I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript. Please send it as a word attachment to querycaitie (at) lizadawson (dot) com with your query in the email, with the PitchWars request in the subject.
Caitie
Melissa Nasson · November 4, 2016 at 1:56 pm
I would love to see more of this. Please send the full manuscript as a Word doc or PDF to melissa@rpcontent.com, and be sure to include “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. Please also include your query in the body of the email.
Thank you!
Melissa Nasson
Rubin Pfeffer Content
Hillary Jacobson · November 4, 2016 at 2:07 pm
I absolutely love the idea of this! Please send the full manuscript to hjacobson@icmpartners.com. Thank you!
Logan Garrison Savits · November 4, 2016 at 2:15 pm
Hi! I’d love to take a closer look at your work. Please send your query letter in the body of an email and attach the full manuscript as a word or pdf doc. You can reach me at lgarrison (at) thegernertco (dot) com. Thank you!
~Logan Garrison Savits
The Gernert Company
Victoria Marini · November 4, 2016 at 3:01 pm
Dear Elizabeth,
I loved this! Can you please send whatever material you have to victoria.queries@irenegoodman.com with “query” and “pitchwars” somewhere in the subject line?
Thank you so much!
All my best,
Victoria
Laura Biagi, Jean V. Naggar Literary Agency · November 4, 2016 at 5:32 pm
Loving this voice! Please send the full manuscript + query + synopsis to LBiagi (at) jvnla (dot) com, with Pitch Wars in the subject line. Can’t wait to read!
Patricia Nelson · November 4, 2016 at 5:38 pm
I would love to see more of this! Please send a query (in the body of the email) plus the full manuscript as a Word doc attachment to patricia@marsallyonliteraryagency.com, and make sure to put “Pitch Wars Request” and the title in the subject line.
Looking forward to reading!
Christa Heschke (@ChristaHeschke) · November 4, 2016 at 6:36 pm
I really liked this and would love to take a look! Please send a query, synopsis and full manuscript to chquery@mcintoshandotis.com. Please mark “Pitch Wars request” in the subject line. –Christa Heschke
Amy Jameson · November 5, 2016 at 12:42 pm
Now that is a pitch-perfect middle grade voice. Love to see the complete manuscript! Please send as a Word document with the title as the subject line to amy (at) aplusbworks (dot) com. Thanks!
Susan Hawk · November 5, 2016 at 1:19 pm
Absolutely loved this! Please send the complete manuscript and query to me at: kidsqueries@thebentagency.com; include PITCH WARS in the subject. Can’t wait to read!
Pete Knapp · November 5, 2016 at 8:05 pm
This opening is fantastic! I’d love to keep reading. Please send the full manuscript attached as a Word document to queries@parkliterary.com with “Pitch Wars – Pete Knapp” in the subject. Looking forward to reading! – Pete Knapp
Victoria Selvaggio · November 8, 2016 at 12:03 pm
I’d LOVE to see more of this! Please forward the first 50 pages to vselvaggio@windstream.net, and put “PITCHWARS” in the subject line.
Andrea Somberg · November 8, 2016 at 4:20 pm
I’d love take a look at the full manuscript! Please feel free to send it along as a word document to andrea [at] harveyklinger.com with “PitchWars Requested Manuscript” in the subject line. Thanks! I’m looking forward to reading.
best,
Andrea Somberg
Harvey Klinger Inc.
Andrea Somberg · November 8, 2016 at 4:35 pm
I’d love take a look at the full manuscript! Please feel free to send it along as a word document to andrea [at] harveyklinger.com with “PitchWars Requested Manuscript” in the subject line. Thanks! I’m looking forward to reading.
best,
Andrea Somberg
Harvey Klinger Inc.
Roseanne Wells · November 10, 2016 at 11:06 am
Hi Elizabeth–A great opening with a strong voice. Please send the manuscript and a synopsis as Word doc attachments to queryroseanne@gmail.com with Pitch Wars and Query + title in the subject line. Can’t wait to read!
Roseanne Wells
The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency
Whitley Abell (@whitleyabell) · November 10, 2016 at 2:41 pm
I’d love to read more! Please send the full manuscript to whitley@inklingsliterary.com with “Pitch Wars: [TITLE]” as the subject line. And if you wouldn’t mind, could you please include your query on the first page of the word doc?. I look forward to reading!
Lara Perkins, Andrea Brown Literary Agency · November 11, 2016 at 12:13 pm
What a strong beginning! I’d love to take a look at your full ms. Please feel free to send the full to me at lara@andreabrownlit.com with “Requested: Pitch Wars” in the subject line, and please include your query in the body of the email. Thank you!
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