Manuscript Status: Finished
Mentor Name: Monica M. Hoffman
Mentee Name: Hannah Whitten
Title: FOR THE WOLF
Category: Young Adult
Genre: Fantasy
Word Count: 94,000
Pitch:
Plagued by frightening power she can’t control, Red is almost relieved to be sent as a sacrifice to the Wolf. But the magic she thought was a curse is the only thing that can save her kingdom—and the Wolf himself—from a growing evil beyond the Wood.
Excerpt:
The crimson gown cast a bloody sheen on Neve’s pale face as she straightened her sister’s train, summoning a tentative smile. “Red for Redarys.”
Red’s expression in the mirror was closer to a grimace than a grin, teeth bared with no emotion behind them. The words of the Amalthecron echoed through her head, an endless litany.
The First Daughter is for the throne. The Second Daughter is for the Wolf.
Neve’s smile faltered. She reached for Red’s hand, gripping it like a vice. “I meant what I told you earlier,” she whispered. “I’ll cover for you, if you run.”
“And I meant what I told you. The Wolf will only trap the darkness beyond the Wood if we pay the price.” Red’s voice sounded hollow, the phrase’s meaning lost by endless repetition. She didn’t look at her sister in the mirror, instead focusing on the smooth fabric of her skirt beneath her fingers. “I have to go.”
Neve let go of her hand. “Do you want to leave us that badly?”
“You know that’s not it.” Not all of it.
“We don’t even know if it’s true.” Neve’s voice dropped to barely a whisper, though she and Red were alone in the room. The words amounted to heresy, and even the First Daughter wasn’t exempt from punishment. “All that about the Wolf and the darkness.”
Red didn’t respond. They’d been over this countless times, a familiar call and response of rote arguments and half-hearted excuses.
10 Comments
Jessie Devine · November 3, 2017 at 1:45 am
I love this! Please query me and upload the full manuscript here: QueryMe.online/devinequeries/PitchWars
Carrie Hannigan · November 3, 2017 at 10:40 am
Hi Hannah,
I would love to see more! Please send your query to channigan@hsgagency.com and attach the first 100 pages as a word document. Also please include “Pitch Wars YA” in your subject line.
Thanks!
Carrie
Rena Rossner · November 3, 2017 at 11:00 am
I’d love to take a closer look at the first 100 pages. Please send them attached as a word document to: rena@thedeborahharrisagency.com
– Rena
Quressa Robinson · November 3, 2017 at 2:39 pm
I am intrigued! I’d love to see more. I may not be the only agent here at Nelson Literary Agency who wants to read your amazing work! If that is the case, please send just one email to query@nelsonagency.com with PITCH WARS UPLOAD in the subject line. We will reply with our upload instructions, and then all the interested NLA agents will read and consider your manuscript. Thank you!”
Danielle Burby · November 3, 2017 at 3:30 pm
I’m looking forward to reading the latest version of this! I was enjoying it before you were selected for PitchWars and you’d better believe I’m still in the mix 😀
Natascha Morris · November 3, 2017 at 6:10 pm
I’m looking forward to see the revision! Please send me the full manuscript at QueryMe.online/1067/PitchWars2017!
Thank you!
Natascha Morris
Roseanne Wells · November 3, 2017 at 8:09 pm
I want to read this right now! Please use the guidelines on jdlit.com to send 100pp (instead of the normal 20), and include #Pitchwars in the subject line. I can’t wait to dive in!
Roseanne Wells
The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency
Lynnette Novak · November 4, 2017 at 5:08 pm
OMG. This premise is incredible. I love retellings, but I’m DYING to read this one!!!
Please send the full manuscript to Lynnette@theseymouragency.com, attached as a Word document with the query as the first page. Put “Pitch Wars” and your title in the subject line. Please also include a brief synopsis as a separate document. Thanks! Can’t wait to read!
Lynnette Novak
The Seymour Agency
Melissa Nasson · November 6, 2017 at 3:50 pm
Hannah, this sounds awesome! Please send the full manuscript as a Word doc or PDF attachment to melissa@rpcontent.com. Please also include your query letter in the body of the email, and Pitch Wars in the subject line.
I look forward to reading!
Thanks,
Melissa Nasson
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Kelly Sonnack · November 6, 2017 at 11:44 pm
REALLY looking forward to seeing this again! Please send the entire by email!!!!
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