Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Name: Shari Green

Mentee Name: Judith L. Roth

Title: HOME IS WHERE

Category: Middle Grade

Genre: Contemporary verse

Word Count: 22,300 words

Pitch:

Since Grandma died, Emma’s mom has been sleep-walking through life. When Mom suddenly packs up Emma and her little sister, driving them cross-country to visit Kentucky relatives, it’s up to Emma to get them back to Dad before Mom puts down roots in a place that’s nothing like home. For fans of Sharon Creech.

Excerpt:

Nine days before the start of school

            Mom packs the car for a trip.

 

California to Kentucky and back in zoom time.

 

No explanation.

            (Unless you count Mom saying,

             Aunt Zelma won’t be around forever.)

 

No time to tell Caden and Petra

            we’re leaving.

 

No room in the car

            for Dad.

 

*

 

Come on, Emma, Mom says.

            Get in. Time to go.

           

Zoë huddles in the back

            clutching her old baby blanket…

            thumb straining like

            it wants to plant itself

                        in her mouth.

           

Aren’t we going to wait

            until Dad gets home? I ask.

            Hoping Dad got my message.

I want to say goodbye.

 

Mom shakes her head.

            Gotta get on the road.

            There’s a lot of ground to cover

                        before we stop for the night.

 

I think about saying no.

            Just, No.

            But this last year

            I’ve been walking around Mom

                        like she’s a Jenga tower

                        ready to collapse with any false move.

 

I slouch toward the car.

            Wait a minute!

            I dash into the house

            run to Grandma’s room

                        right over to her window ledge.

           

A forest of tiny animal figures looks up at me.

            I tuck one little critter into my hand

                        before I head out again.

 

*

 

Dad’s truck slams to a stop by the curb

            as I’m getting in Mom’s car.

            Darla? he calls. What’s going on?

           

I told you I needed to get to Kentucky,

            Mom says.

            Now.

She starts the engine

            while Dad stands with his mouth open.

 

 

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5 Comments

Natascha Morris · November 1, 2017 at 11:28 pm

I’m intrigued. Please query me at QueryMe.online/1067/PitchWars2017. Thank you!

Best,
Natascha Morris

Jim McCarthy · November 2, 2017 at 8:46 am

I would love to see this! Please send the full manuscript to me at jmccarthy@dystel.com. A Word attachment is most preferable if possible. Best, Jim

Carrie Hannigan · November 2, 2017 at 10:28 am

Hi Judith,

I would love to read more! Please send your query to channigan@hsgagency.com with the first 100 pages attached as a word document. Also please include “Pitch Wars” in your subject line.

Thanks so much!
Carrie (Hannigan Salky Getzler)

Brent Taylor · November 5, 2017 at 10:05 am

Would love to have a closer look at this. Please send the full manuscript to brent(@)triadaus(.)com. Looking forward!

Rena Rossner · November 6, 2017 at 4:15 pm

I’d love to read this! Please send the full manuscript attached as a word document to: rena@thedeborahharrisagency.com

Thanks!

– Rena

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