Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Name: Michelle Hauck

Mentee Name: Jason Hine

Title: NIGHTMARE INK

Category: Adult

Genre: Urban Fantasy

Word Count: 108,000 words

Pitch:

Professional curse magnet Wayne is doomed to live forever and watch everyone he loves suffer lethal accidents—including his daughter. Until he snags a contract offering one genuine miracle—for a price. He has two days in Las Vegas to ensure the witch-girl who’s dreamt up a new breed of nightmares never wakes. Trouble is, he’s not the only one after her, and damned if she doesn’t remind him of his daughter.

Sample:

Not even the Devil himself wanted to buy Wayne’s soul. When he’d offered it at a steep discount, the fork-tongued prick just laughed, a hissing sound like air escaping a deflating tire. Even said Wayne’d bring the whole place down with him. That’d seemed like a stretch at the time, since it didn’t get a whole lot lower than hell, but that was before Wayne set foot in the Armadillo Cantina.

The Armadillo squatted about six miles outside of Tucson and was as deep a dive as you could sink to without an oxygen tank. Cigarette smoke merged with the smell of deep-fried greasebombs. College kids wouldn’t even come here. Only a half dozen shit-faced bikers chugging cerveza and shooting pool. When Wayne’s eyes passed over them, each gave their best I will pound your teeth down your throat stare. With the matching patches on their jackets and paunches hanging over their belt buckles, they looked like mall cops playing at Sons of Anarchy.

Wayne thought about pointing that out, but it’d been a while since he’d been shot, stabbed, or beaten—might as well keep the streak going a little longer. Taking a beating hurt worse than the other two, but he’d had plenty of experiences with each over the past three-hundred years. Anyone saying they wanted to live forever had never tried it.

 

Categories: PW Entries

10 Comments

Sam Morgan · November 1, 2017 at 11:33 am

Sounds lit. I’d love to read more. Could you please send me the first three chapters in a .doc to smorgan at foundrymedia dot com with the subject line “Pitch Wars VI: Return of the Pitch”

Lauren Spieller · November 1, 2017 at 11:50 am

Great voice and I love the premise. I’d like to see your query in the body of an email, along with the full manuscript and a synopsis (both attached). Please also include a link to this entry. You can send your materials to lauren@triadaus.com. I look forward to reading!

Lauren

Joanna · November 1, 2017 at 5:13 pm

Love the voice here. I’d love to see the full. Please email me at queryjoanna@nelsonagency.com. In the subject line, write PitchWars and the title of your project. This will help ensure that your query isn’t accidentally deleted or caught in our spam filter. In the body of your email, include a one-page query letter and the first twenty pages of your manuscript.

Roseanne Wells · November 1, 2017 at 8:54 pm

I’d love to take a look! Please use the guidelines on jdlit.com to send 30 pp (instead of the usual 20) and put #pitchwars in the subject line. I can’t wait to read more!

Roseanne Wells
The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency

Caitlin McDonald · November 2, 2017 at 11:12 am

What a voice! I’d love to see more of this. Please send the query, synopsis, and full manuscript (as an attachment) to query.cmcdonald@maassagency.com and include “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. Looking forward to reading!

Andrea Somberg · November 2, 2017 at 1:04 pm

I would love to read more! Please feel free to send the query and the manuscript as a word document to andrea@harveyklinger.com, with Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thanks!

Emmanuelle Morgen · November 2, 2017 at 2:53 pm

This sounds great! I’d like to read more. Could you send the full manuscript to me at submissions@stonesong.com?

Stephen Barbara · November 2, 2017 at 4:36 pm

Hi Jason: I’d be interested to continue reading NIGHTMARE INK. Could you send the full manuscript to stephen@inkwellmanagement.com? Best, Stephen

Ella Marie Shupe · November 2, 2017 at 11:14 pm

Hi Jason,
Your writing has captured my attention. Wayne and his witch-girl daughter are original characters, and I’d love to read their journey. I’ll look at the full. Please send it as an attachment to ellamarie@belcastroagency.com. Please add Pitch Wars to the subject line.
Best,
Ella Marie

Rena Rossner · November 6, 2017 at 6:12 pm

I’d love to take a closer look! Please send the full manuscript attached as a word document to: rena@thedeborahharrisagency.com

Thanks!

– Rena

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