Pitchwars Badge (Square YA)

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Name: Megan Grimit
Mentee Name: Sheena Boekweg
Title: THE WAXLING
Category: YA
Genre: Contemporary Fantasy
Word Count: 70,000 words

Pitch:

The Waxling was supposed to be a monster, made from the mold of a dead girl. A creature Arialle spent years training to protect, for the powerful wish maturing within its seed heart.

Blake’s also been trained— to hunt down the monster and steal the wish to save his dying mother. But when the Waxling wakes, they discover she’s not a monster at all. She’s trusting, kind, beautiful…

And wanted dead by both their families.

Excerpt:

The stupid mannequins wouldn’t stop glaring at me from the gift shop window. Their eyeless stares followed me around the bus station as I dropped my bag, slumped into a seat by the garbage, and glanced back.

One plastic faceless statue still judged me from beneath a Welcome to Tacoma baseball hat.

I flipped it off. “Look elsewhere, freak,” I mumbled. I put my boots up on the chair across from me.

The noise startled a little boy sleeping on his mother’s lap. A smear of chocolate covered his lip.

The mom didn’t notice. She didn’t wipe his face. Wipe his stupid face.

My eyes stung, so I closed them.

Mattie would be okay without me. He didn’t need his big sister to watch out for him. I had to think for myself here. He wasn’t the Protector. They weren’t going to train him the way they trained me. No one would be that cruel.

To him.

Soft music played through the sound system as I peeked at the clock. Seven minutes to freedom. My heel bounced against the vinyl chair. The mom glanced up, looking twice. Once, to judge my long dress and old-fashioned braid, and again, probably to peg me as a member of a cult. She woke up her son and changed seats.

I gritted my teeth.

She wasn’t wrong.

 

Categories: Pitch Wars

7 Comments

Suzie Townsend · November 3, 2015 at 10:52 pm

I’d love to request the query + full manuscript

Leon Husock · November 4, 2015 at 10:26 am

I’d like to see more! Please send a query + the full MS to leon@lperkinsagency (with Pitch Wars in the subject line), along with a one-sentence description of your book.

Louise Fury · November 5, 2015 at 10:59 am

I’d love to read more. Please send me the query and attach the first 50 pages in a word document with the pitch on page 1. Include #pitchwars in the subject heading. furyqueries(at)thebentagency(dot)com
Thanks!

Claire Anderson-Wheeler · November 5, 2015 at 4:05 pm

Hi Sheena

I’m keen to read this – could you send me the full MS as a Word doc and if possible, an expanded synopsis (ideally 500-700 words)? claire at rhaliterary dot com.

Looking forward to reading more!
Claire

Kitty Walker · November 6, 2015 at 9:47 am

Really good excerpt – do send the full MS to kitty@evewhite.co.uk

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