Manuscript Status: Finished
Mentor Name: Cat Scully
Mentee Name: Kendal Snow
Title: THE FLYING GARZINIS
Category: Middle Grade
Genre: Mystery
Word Count: 63,000
Pitch:
Elsie doesn’t believe in magic—or curses. But when the strongman goes missing and fires threaten to destroy her parents’ trapeze troupe, she must uncover the truth behind a decades-old circus curse and a mysterious falconer who makes everything around him change shape, including Elsie’s own memories. Nancy Drew meets Something Wicked This Way Comes.
Excerpt:
The circus was a normal place to live until a few hours before showtime. After a lazy Sunday spent washing laundry and raking leaves, performers stretched across the fairground lawn. They juggled ceramic vases with their eyes closed or back flipped off their brother’s shoulders to warm up for the evening ahead. It didn’t matter that the ticket booth hadn’t opened and the audience hadn’t arrived; Applegate and Rook’s Festival of Mysteries rumbled with activity.
Elsie Caldera moved through the crowd, dodging outstretched arms and whirling props. Even the fire jugglers didn’t slow her down.
Strands of lights hung across the midway. They hadn’t been switched on yet, and the wires crisscrossed the sky like a web. Mr. Riabold sat perched on a ladder. His head brushed the lights as he strapped on his stilts. It wasn’t time for him to enter the ring—he wasn’t even in costume—but he always tried on his stilts before showtime so he could remember what it felt like to be ten feet tall.
Elsie squinted up at him. “Have you seen Oskar?”
If anyone had a bird’s eye view to spot a missing strongman, it was Mr. Riabold. But he hadn’t seen him. Neither had the Palermo twins, brother and sister contortionists who sat twisted in knots by the tent.
“Haven’t seen him since breakfast,” the brother said as he lay on his stomach with his legs arched over his head, his toes on his eyebrows.
15 Comments
Amy Jameson · November 2, 2015 at 11:57 pm
Oooh, I’m totally in! Love the pitch. Please send the complete manuscript as a Word doc to query(at)aplusbworks.com. And I’d love to know more about you, so please tell me about yourself!
Rachel Marks · November 3, 2015 at 12:55 am
I have always loved the circus 🙂 Please send on over the first 100 pages in a word doc to rachel@rfliterary.com. In the subject line put Pitch Wars Request. I can’t wait to dive in!
Leon Husock · November 3, 2015 at 11:34 am
I’d like to see more! Please send a query + the full MS to leon@lperkinsagency (with Pitch Wars in the subject line), along with a one-sentence description of your book.
Peter Knapp · November 3, 2015 at 1:01 pm
Excited to read this one — please send to query@newleafliterary.com!
Claire Anderson-Wheeler · November 3, 2015 at 1:56 pm
Hi Kendal
This looks great and I’d love to see more. Could you send me a detailed synopsis (500-700 words would be wonderful) together with the full MS as a Word doc to claire at rhaliterary dot com?
Good luck!
Claire
Jim McCarthy · November 3, 2015 at 2:56 pm
Circus curses? Yes, please. I’m at jmccarthy@dystel.com and would love to have a look. Word attachments most preferable if possible!
Rena Rossner · November 4, 2015 at 6:51 am
I’d love to read more of this! Please send the first 50 pages attached as a word document to:
rena(at)thedeborahharrisagency(dot)com
Thanks!
Rena Rossner
Laura Zats · November 4, 2015 at 10:13 am
I’ve been looking for a good circus book for almost two years! This one seems right up my alley! Please send a query (with #pitchwars in the title) as well as the first 100 pages to laura@redsofaliterary.com!
Stefanie Lieberman · November 4, 2015 at 12:19 pm
I’d like to read more! Please send the first 50 pages in Word format and a query letter to submissions@janklow.com, and include “Stefanie Lieberman” in the subject line of the email. Thanks!
Louise Fury · November 4, 2015 at 10:38 pm
I’d love to see more. Please send me the query and first 50 pages in a word document with the pitch on page 1. Include #pitchwars in the subject heading. furyqueries(at)thebentagency(dot)com
Thanks!
Jaida Temperly · November 5, 2015 at 8:26 am
Love this! Please send the query + full manuscript to query@newleafliterary.com with the subject line, PITCH WARS – JAIDA. Looking forward to reading!
Christa Heschke · November 5, 2015 at 12:25 pm
This sounds really cool!Please send the first 25 pages, query and synopsis to chquery[at]mcintoshandotis[dot]com and put “Pitch Wars request” in the subject line.
Thanks,
Christa Heschke
McIntosh & Otis, Inc.
Moe Ferrara · November 5, 2015 at 4:36 pm
!!!! I’ve been on the hunt for a good circus story. I love this and definitely want to see more. Please send the query + synopsis + Full Manuscript in one word doc to MFsubmissions [at] bookendsliterary.com with “PitchWars Request – THE FLYING GARZINIS” as the subject. I can’t wait to take a look!
Victoria Marini · November 6, 2015 at 11:42 am
Hey Kendal,
I was lurking on PitchWars and I LOVED this entry! Brenda was kind enough to let me comment here. If you’re able, I would love to see the query and the full manuscript, please! Victoria@gelfmanschneider.com
Thanks!
Victoria
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