MENTOR: Trisha Leaver

MENTEE: ERIKA DAVID

TITLE: THE BARRENS

CATEGORY/GENRE: YA Contemporary Sci-fi Thriller

WORD COUNT: 87,000

 

PITCH:

When a scientist and his teen sons join her subterranean biomine, Niko thinks her life is finally beginning. But the thrill of a first boyfriend is overshadowed by mysterious accidents and deaths, and if Niko can’t figure out how or why, her life will be over before it’s barely begun.

 

EXCERPT:

They say when the wind blows, you can either break like an oak or bend like a willow. I’d hoped there might be a third option—hiding—an alternative inspired by the lowly and unobtrusive crustose lichen.

It’s not working.

The winds, both literal and figurative, have me firmly in their sights. They rage around me as I stand on the landing pad watching the helicopter crest over the stand of scrawny jack pines. I hug my arms close and hunch down, trying to make less of a target for the bitter May gales. It’s useless. Just like it’s useless trying to hide from the fact that in a few moments, I will have to meet Janus’s replacement.

The copter lands in a maelstrom of dust and desiccated leaves. Before the blades stop spinning, my father has already ordered Duncan, our security chief, to advance on the craft. Pieter can’t wait to return to the Barrens. He hates the surface, hates anything that takes him away from his beloved lab. Not me. I live for these rare opportunities to experience the sky unspooling around me. To feel fresh air move across my skin. To smell the tang of pine, or even the stink of marsh mud.

But not today. Today I would stay below forever if it meant I could avoid meeting this new bioengineer and facing the reality that Janus is truly gone.

Behind me Pieter clears his throat. “What?” I ask.

 

 

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4 Comments

Brianne Johnson · January 22, 2014 at 12:05 am

Love the humor and the urgency and the language here. Would love to see the first 50 pages! Would you email it to me, pretty please?

Jennifer Udden · January 22, 2014 at 11:09 am

Great voice here. Can you send me 100 pages?

judden at maassagency dot com

Jennifer Udden
DMLA

Lana Popovic · January 22, 2014 at 12:17 pm

Beautiful! Could I see the first fifty, please? Send to lpopovic@zshliterary.com 🙂

Evan Gregory · January 22, 2014 at 12:53 pm

Send text of this pitch, synopsis, and first 50 pages to agent@ethanellenberg.com Put “#PitchWars Request” in the subject line.

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