MENTOR: Jessie Humphries

MENTEE: Andy Hertzenberg

TITLE: ONLY IN MY DREAMS

CATEGORY/GENRE: YA Contemporary

WORD COUNT: 55,000

 

PITCH:

When fangirl Olivia Davis saves Hollywood hunk Kit Taylor’s life it should have been a good thing. Except that he ends up in coma, his family mistakes her for his girlfriend, and despite best intentions, she gets tangled up in a messy web of lies that is bound to break more than one heart.

 

EXCERPT:

In my seventeen years I’ve been to Paris, Tokyo, and Egypt. I’ve walked the streets of Victorian London, visited the underwater world of Atlantis, and survived at least four versions of a dystopian outer space. That’s me, Olivia Davis, time traveling jet setter.

Or, you know part-time employee at Universal Studios.

But the last time I was in the Hollywood Hospital I was seven, and didn’t know what was going on. I don’t remember the waiting room being this jam-packed. In fact, I think Gran and I were the only people here. This time there’s hardly room for me to elbow my way through to the nursing station. In a sliver of space between two reporters I spot an opening.

“Excuse me,” I say, pushing past them.

Even their dirty looks can’t slow me down. Not that anything would stop me. Kit’s in the back somewhere, and I have to know if he’s okay. Last I saw of him he was unconscious getting loaded into an ambulance. They would have woken him up by now, right?  He has to be okay. He’s a celebrity. They wouldn’t let him die. Then again they’re not supposed to let anyone die. It’s not like he’s super human.

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6 Comments

Carly Watters · January 22, 2014 at 8:51 am

I’m intrigued….

Can you send me 100 pages please?

Thanks.

Carly
P.S. Literary Agency
@carlywatters

Rena Rossner · January 22, 2014 at 9:04 am

I like the voice in this. Can I see the full MS?

– Rena Rossner
rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com

Jennifer Udden · January 22, 2014 at 11:01 am

Sounds intriguing! Can you send me the full manuscript please?

judden at maassagency dot com

Jennifer Udden
DMLA

Pam · January 22, 2014 at 12:10 pm

I’d also like to see the full please. querypam@forewordliterary.com

Natasha Alexis · January 22, 2014 at 2:04 pm

This setup looks hilarious Andy! Please send the full ms to my email, thanks!
nalexis@zshliterary.com
@agntalexis

Stefanie Lieberman · January 22, 2014 at 4:40 pm

I’d like to see more! If you are interested in submitting to me, please send three chapters to submissions(at)janklow(dot)com. Please include my name in the subject line and indicate that this is a Pitch Wars submission in the body of your email.

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