Genre: YA Contemporary
Word Count: 62,000
Pitch:
Cancer: five. Stella: zero. On the brink of death, Stella is leading a double life. At home there’s her dedicated and protective boyfriend. And at the hospital there’s the quirky boy who’s stealing her heart.
Excerpt:
It happens quick. Like a lightning strike. An electric shock rocks my body with so much momentum I’m sure I’m having a heart attack.
But my head isn’t throbbing. The room isn’t spinning. I’m still sitting up. I’m not dead.
And then it’s gone. Like it never happened. But it did. And I know what it is.
My fork falls from my hand. It clatters against my mom’s favorite China, making a sound as loud as a well-placed shot on the first day of hunting season. Two heads turn in my direction fast as The Flash. There’s no way to recover. My mom can see the deer-in-the-headlights look on my face. She doesn’t realize what just happened, but she knows something’s wrong.
“What?” I ask, picking up my fork, two peas still lodged on one of the prongs. I give a quick shake of the head, suppressing the uncontrollable urge to toss the fork across the room. Instead I grip it in the palm of my hand, squeezing hard enough to turn my knuckles white, my fingernails digging deep into my skin.
“What’s wrong?” she asks in a trembling voice, her face a mask of confidence.
“Nothing,” I reply as calmly as I can, my shaking body betraying everything my mouth is trying not to.
“Stella?” It’s my dad this time. They’re always waiting for the bottom to fall out. And it always seems moments away from happening.
I clench my teeth together before forcing a smile on my face.
7 Comments
Jordy · September 6, 2013 at 3:44 pm
$10 🙂
Anonymous · September 6, 2013 at 5:53 pm
Please send query and first 20 pages to Uwe Stender.
Anonymous · September 9, 2013 at 7:01 pm
Ship plays Advance to Full Request
Carlie Webber · September 9, 2013 at 10:08 pm
I bid 100.
fifitheninja · September 10, 2013 at 4:20 pm
Your writing is smart and very relatable, coming form someone who lives with a chronic illness. “They’re always waiting for the bottom to fall out. And it always seems moments away from happening.” Gave me chills.
Kimberly VanderHorst · September 11, 2013 at 2:44 pm
The pitch for this is one of the best pitches in the entire contest, if you ask me. Brilliant summarized! And of all the excerpts, yours grabbed me by the heart the hardest. Instant emotional connection – no easy thing to do in the first page. So . . . wow. Just wow. =)
Sara · September 11, 2013 at 2:50 pm
Awesome pitch – definitely makes me want to read the whole thing.
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