Genre: YA Thriller
Word count: 54,000
Query:
Pretending to be someone else has its difficulties. Seventeen-year-old Prism Chase thought it would be fun until the game turns deadly. She has exactly forty-eight hours to stop her charades and come clean about who she really is or people will die.
After she witnesses the murder of a government official, Prism goes into the witness protection program. Still scared that she isn’t safe, she comes up with a brilliant plan. She secretly switches places with another girl in the program who is on the run from a crazed bounty hunter. Instead of hiding, though, Prism steps right into the hands of the man who murdered the official.
Query:
Pretending to be someone else has its difficulties. Seventeen-year-old Prism Chase thought it would be fun until the game turns deadly. She has exactly forty-eight hours to stop her charades and come clean about who she really is or people will die.
After she witnesses the murder of a government official, Prism goes into the witness protection program. Still scared that she isn’t safe, she comes up with a brilliant plan. She secretly switches places with another girl in the program who is on the run from a crazed bounty hunter. Instead of hiding, though, Prism steps right into the hands of the man who murdered the official.
As hours dwindle, Prism must figure out how to escape from the enemy, who is playing the part of protector and thinks she is someone else. Deeper secrets surface when Prism discovers her fake hideout is the battlegrounds for a pending war and the girl she swapped places with is the reason for the battle. Now, Prism must prove she’s not the girl she’s pretending to be, but in doing so, she risks not only her life, but the life of the girl she traded identities with, who has secrets of her own.
Excerpt:
Kallie Jenson’s obit brought tears to my eyes. The funeral was closed casket and the family recited a poem Kallie wrote the day she died. My tears were fake, though. Not because I’m cold-hearted, but because I was Kallie Jenson. Before her, I was Kimberly Jones. Now, I go by Prism Chase. No one knows me, the real me. I’ve been someone else for so long, I’m not sure I’d recognize myself.
This meant I was moving again.I folded the newspaper and slid it into my carryon bag. The dark clouds hinted at rain, and I snuck glances over my shoulder while I crossed the street.
I couldn’t tell people my real name. I haven’t gone by that name since junior high when I was freshly introduced to the witness protection program. I thought it would be fun and exciting. An adventure, my mama told me. I‘d be a new person. New clothes, new friends, new home, new identity. A new me.
A lot of new me’s.
The airport doors slid open and I paused. Maybe I could just stop running and be me again. An older man swinging a closed umbrella mumbled something under his breath, but I couldn’t hear him and I didn’t answer.
Over time, I’ve learned never to talk to strangers, never trust anyone, especially friends, and to be suspicious of my neighbor, the librarian, and the bus driver. I couldn’t give my number to my boyfriend. Heck. I wasn’t allowed to have a boyfriend.
17 Comments
Marieke · May 20, 2013 at 5:58 am
Oh my goodness, I love this concept! It sounds fantastic! Good luck! 😀
Artemis Grey · May 20, 2013 at 6:47 am
Very intriguing! Good luck!!!
Copernicus Nerdicus · May 20, 2013 at 9:41 am
Love this, so glad you were on my team!
Ann Noser · May 20, 2013 at 1:19 pm
Really well done. Nice voice and tight tension.
jessmontgomery · May 21, 2013 at 12:35 pm
Ahh!! This sounds so awesome!! 😀 Best of luck! I am cheering for you 😀
Melissa Pearl · May 21, 2013 at 3:19 pm
What a cool premise 😉 Awesome stuff 🙂
Jenny Kaczorowski · May 21, 2013 at 4:11 pm
I love your new title! You did a great job tightening & polishing. Good luck!
Anoosha · May 21, 2013 at 7:09 pm
Interesting premise! I love the voice too! 🙂
L. T. Host · May 22, 2013 at 9:36 pm
Good luck!!
Christa Heschke · May 23, 2013 at 8:54 am
Sounds great. I’d love to see it!
Monika Verma · May 23, 2013 at 1:11 pm
Would love to see this!
Monika
Jessica Harvey · May 23, 2013 at 2:42 pm
I still this this is amazing 🙂 And I do love the new title, too!
John Rudolph · May 24, 2013 at 8:44 am
Sure, I’ll take a look. Thanks!
Anonymous · May 24, 2013 at 6:13 pm
You’ve been ninja’d! I would love to see a pitch, one-page synopsis, and the first fifty pages. Please send it as a word attachment to…(contact Brenda for further details!). Looking forward to reading your work 🙂
–RED NINJA
Anonymous · May 26, 2013 at 1:30 pm
Double-Ninja’ed. I’d also love to see the pitch and the first three chapters or up to 10,000 words. Please contact Brenda for further details.
– ECHO NINJA.
Anonymous · May 26, 2013 at 1:30 pm
Double-Ninja’ed. I’d also love to see the pitch and the first three chapters or up to 10,000 words. Please contact Brenda for further details.
– ECHO NINJA.
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