MENTOR: Sarah Henning
MENTEE: Dan Malossi
TITLE: THE FISHERMAN
CATEGORY/GENRE: Adult Psychological Thriller
WORD COUNT: 91,000
PITCH:
Jude Fisher’s love is the kiss of death. Ever since his parents’ murder, anyone he cares for dies. Ten people in ten years, the last being beautiful, brave Angela, ruined right before Jude’s eyes. Haunted and hungry for answers, Jude journeys to upstate New York to confront the violent man who set the terrible curse in motion.
EXCERPT:
The vision came hard on Jude Fisher.
As always, it went like this: The frantic rush of headlamps (too fast, too close, too quickly on top of them), the white-hot starburst spurting across his visual field, a result of brain smashed against skullbone. The porcine squeal of wrenching metal. The heavy, industrial crunch of automotive exoskeleton. The sweet foulness of spilled blood, pouring and pooling.
My own? Am I dead?
Even worse, the watery whine dripping from his poor mother’s lips. Like a woman drowning, a gurgling scream. Over and over and night on night, since age twelve, this was Jude’s sleepscape.
It was hell.
After the wheels of their BMW had stopped spinning in the air, his mother dangled strangely from her overturned seat. Her lumbar spine had snapped upon impact, but little Jude couldn’t have known that. Wrenched sideways, still belted in, body twisted unnaturally. Bleeding arms, broken and hanging in topsy-turvy surrender. Her blood-smeared face hanging upside-down, just a few inches from Jude’s pinned hands. What would he have given to touch his poor mama’s face just one more time, to pull her down and hug her back to life?
And then the bad man came.
Jude could hear another car’s door slam, a few scraping steps. Like a zombie in those movies his father was just starting to let him watch.
2 Comments
Natasha Alexis · January 22, 2014 at 12:44 pm
I’m intrigued Dan! Please send a full ms to my email nalexis@zshliterary.com
Hey Ma, I Got Me an Agent!! How I Came to Sign With Douglas Lee of Kimberley Cameron and Associates, Literary Agent Extraordinaire | dan malossi writes stuff here. · November 11, 2015 at 1:29 pm
[…] Then my manuscript was selected for mentoring by the Sarah Henning, a wonderful author, in the 2014 PitchWars manuscript contest on Twitter. Some very essential and insightful revisions (and four more full rejections) followed. […]
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