Screen Name: Kalen O’Donnell
TITLE: Dust to Dust
GENRE: YA Fantasy
For my sixteenth birthday, my oldest brother tried to kill me again.
I was at Starbuck’s getting a celebratory scone when the shadows peeled off the walls and came for me. I cursed and dove for the floor. The hot chick waiting in front of me turned, eyebrows raised over heavily made up eyes. Her perfect lips parted. For a split second I fantasized she was about to ask what I was doing later. Wait, nope, I wasn’t getting laid anytime soon. That was actually her screaming because magic shadows were slashing through the fabric of her Grateful Dead t-shirt. One more reason to hate my brother.
I grabbed her leg and yanked her down to the floor with me. Terror was the coffee shop’s new special of the day as patrons and employees stampeded for the exit. I suffered a few accidental kicks crab-walking me and my damsel in distress under the nearest table. Which was of course brimming with shadows.
Brilliant, Micah.
A midnight black hand reached for my ankle and I tapped my own magic. Dust raced from every corner of the room and stormed the air in furious clouds. The shadows kept coming, undeterred – and Mom wondered why I had insecurity issues. Trent could kill with shadows. Serena could drown you with your own tears. Alice walked through mirrors, Dennis could pull blood from a stone, but me? Oh yeah. Fear the mystic might of my magical dust bunnies!
Lame.
8 Comments
erica m. chapman · March 24, 2011 at 5:57 am
Congrats Kalen!! I loved this one, so glad you are a semi-finalist ;o)
sycamoremeadows · March 24, 2011 at 6:18 am
I love the change to the first paragraph!!! Good luck! (Hope you win!)
rebekahlpurdy · March 24, 2011 at 6:43 am
Kalen,
Best of luck! I also loved the changes you made to your opening paragraph! Great job!
Lori M. Lee · March 24, 2011 at 8:23 am
Woohoo! Congrats, Kalen!
Jen · March 24, 2011 at 10:37 am
This is really, really good! Good luck!
Margie · March 24, 2011 at 10:42 am
Good luck, Kalen. This was one of my faves too.
Julie Hedlund · March 25, 2011 at 12:18 pm
Loved this one. Glad to see it made it in. Good luck!
Kalen O'Donnell · March 25, 2011 at 4:56 pm
Thanks so much guys! Your help in getting this here was invaluable! And all the other entries are fantastic!
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